Both the economy and our environment provide vital aspects to our everyday lives. We make modifications to go the extra mile by recycling, focusing on global warming, or even taking the time to walk to our detination versus driving. Cars are notorious for causing harm as far as pollution goes. What modifications/enhancements are the auto-industry making as an effect of Going Green and are they effective?
Preliminary Conclusion- I predict that although costly, these modifications made will be in the best interest of the population. I will research different car companies' new advancements and compare and contrast them to past innovations.
This paper will inform the audience of the direction of the ever-growing auto industry and will exam whether or not green modifications to vehicals make economic sense.
Nice work so far! The ideas are all there; now lets work on developing consistency in tone. Some of your sentences are informal; others are formal. Remember: you are writing for an academic audience here, so you will want to aim for a consistent tone throughout.
ReplyDeleteTo fix, start by reading aloud for awkward spots. Read aloud to someone else too! You may also want to look at some sample abstracts from some of your research and see if you can emulate some of the syntax that you see there. Great start.